I like most of the melodies/key-changes and individual sounds used. You need some flam on the hihats and a ride cymbal- that’d be the main thing.
Noticed some loop slightly outa sync ‘n’ needs a small bit of quantization to keep it closer to the beat. More individual reverb per instrument and some fx sounds- particularly around the beginning wouldn’t go astray.
Can I ask what you’re writing on- fruity or something?
Anyway, overall, I like the track and hope you keep working on it- I write on Reason (4 at the mo) ‘n’ am interested in collabs
Keep up the good work